imported>Swordbearer: /* Suggestion */

2009-02-03T00:53:53Z

Suggestion

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==Potential ==
May I say this story has great potential, but we have had examples of stories that rush through everything too fast. I may suggest you add a lot more detail before carrying on. Hope it evolves greatly.
[[User:Sambrook the otter |Sambrook the otter ]] [[Image:Sambrook.jpg| 20px | ]] [[User talk:Sambrook the otter |Talk!]] 14:17, 22 October 2008 (UTC)

==Yep==
This story does have alot of potential, i can tell from the first few lines that you can write, but

DETAILS DETAILS DETAILS and expand a bit [[User:Zaran Rhulain|Zaran Rhulain]] [[Image:Tiria_and_Tagg.jpg | 115px | ]] [[User talk:Zaran Rhulain|Talk!]] 01:34, 25 October 2008 (UTC)

==Drat==
You beat me to a story about Rorzan. Ah, well. I'll just write another- and I won't take anything from yours, I promise.[[User:Shieldmaiden |Shieldmaiden ]] [[Image:Matthias2.JPG| 70px | ]] [[User talk:Shieldmaiden |Talk!]] 01:55, 15 December 2008 (UTC)

== Suggestion ==

I'm not a user yet but i still have a suggestion. At the end you have Gorath and Salixa talk about their son having the bloodwrath as if it just comes with growing up. In all the redwall books Bloodwrath was feared and although most badger rulers had it, not all did. I thought I'd just point that out. It's still a good story though, keep working on it!
:Thanks for the suggestion. [[User:Swordbearer|<[]Swordbearer[ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ>]]

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