Talk:The Wildcats (a short book that might never exist)

Format

I helped you do your format, just remember no need to indent, the page automatically does that for you, to seperate paragraphs, just make sure that there is a whole line. But on the whole, funny story. I like it xD

Zaran Rhulain File:Tiria and Tagg.jpg ^Talk! 13:25, 2 November 2008 (UTC)

Thank you! And about the story, it is going to be a continuation to Doomwyte in a way. The Abbess in my story is supposed to be the successor of Abbess Perrit, which as I guess you know is Abbot Glisam's successor. And I suppose you noticed that I credited you on my user page. That is because I often look at your pages and your user page in the editing format but without actually changing anything. And it was your stories that inspired me to make this story.

Ivan the Warrior

Thanks, glad I can be of some inspiration.

Some suggestions, try to make the story more detailed, like on the logboats. How are they destroying the logboats? How come none of the wildcats are killing some shrews if they are close enough to disable the boats? What are they firing with? Where are they? No rising action even for this little skirmish? It's stuff like that will keep the readers hooked.

For more inspiration, look at BJ's books and other fanfictions on this wikia. I research my names, accents, battles, and etc. I predict it will be a long while before I finish the Last Stand of Redwall Abbey. What really makes the story good is if you put a lot of time and effort for just writing one chapter.

Despite my comments, don't scrap your story, I'm hooked.

Zaran Rhulain File:Tiria and Tagg.jpg ^Talk! 00:24, 3 November 2008 (UTC)

Riddle

The riddle in your story is pretty good. But you might want to explain where they got it from and why Maritn's sword was hidden. Oh, and it may help to put the riddle in a format that fits in a little better with the era. =D Detail always helps when writing stories.

Charie Swordmaid File:Tapestryrgn.jpg ^Talk! 02:36, 11 November 2008 (UTC)