User blog comment:AlexanderWiki2002/Siege over Mossflower Country/@comment-7662967-20150405022620

I like this, it's off to a great start XD You've got a nice plot going, but I will say this ;3

When you have giant paragraphs, it's kind of hard to read the story X3 I'd advise to separate them into a new paragraphs each time some one speaks :) Check out the format on this TPF for formatting ideas :D

All in all I really like your start here, It's looking promising! (just .. if you'd separate out the paragraphs, it would make more sense and actually make the story seem less rushed) ;)

But I'll be reading and will comment again. (don't worry about the paragraphs, I did it too ;P) It's just a thing that'll help your writing look better and be more understandable XD

KIU! XD