User blog comment:Bluestripe the Wild/Bluestripe,A Name Remembered/@comment-1153441-20090406170431

Awesome!! Sorry I haven't left any comments. I haven't been on here for the past few days. Your fanfic is great!! One tip though, try to use different synonyms on some of the words. For example, in chapter three when the Guosim go on land to explore, you use the word castle to much in the paragraph. Instead try words like fortress or stronghold. You can still use castle except don't use it as much as you do. Great Story! Haway Braaaaaw!